Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: - Offline/paywalled citation accepted in good faith
Interesting:
QPQ: Done.
Overall: New enough, long enough, Earwig notes no notable copyvio. Hook is interesting but on an offline source (Österreich in Geschichte und Literatur, Vol. 40-41) so I am assuming good faith. QPQ is completed. Everything seems to check out! Ornithoptera (talk) 05:37, 7 May 2024 (UTC)
@Soman and Ornithoptera: This article needs a robust copy edit before it gets anywhere near the main page.--Launchballer 23:23, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
Sorry, Launchballer, but you'd have to be more specific. If you have a problem with another editors tick, you should explain why. You've left drive-by comments on {toomanysections} on a number of DYK nominations in the recent past, is that the issue? --Soman (talk) 11:29, 26 May 2024 (UTC)
I think merging some of the sections would help. I need to go out, but I'll take another look when I get back.--Launchballer 11:37, 26 May 2024 (UTC)
Much of what was winding me up was the fact that many sentences were very short and jumped back and forth, I've merged some of the worst offenders. My "Early life" section header was based purely on the fact that two single-paragraph sections look odd next to two much larger sections, though I suppose this isn't a DYK issue.--Launchballer 09:47, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
I'd also question the WP:DYKINTerestingness of an Austrian politician being an Austrian politician.--Launchballer 10:13, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
I'm not sure this is the correct forum, but I disagree on applying {toomanysections} rigidly. There is no problem in itself to have sections with 3-4 sentences if and when the material in that section is sufficiently distinct from another section. Sections are supposed to help with readability, and lumping prose together to create larger sections is no goal in itself. In terms of your copy-editing, you are diverging from the source material, such as,
By mixing the age of joining SPO and being a leader of the left faction, makes it seem like he was a factional leader from the onset
We have no source for Polzl "joining" the municipal council (presumably he was elected, but we don't have a reference for the exact conditions of entry).
changing "upon" to "after" regarding his arrest gaves space to interpretation of the timeframe between return and arrest.
"he and many of its other members" is backed up by what source?
I'm not saying that there shouldn't be improvements in flow of prose, but copy-editing should not tamper with the referencing. In terms of DYKINTERESTING, I think the key element here is '1945'. This was not an ordinary period in the history of the country, and Polzl is the only Communist Party cadre that had been in the government prior to arrival of Soviet troops as well as remaining in the position after the British takeover. --Soman (talk) 17:22, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
All I did was reword the text as it appeared, I didn't check it against the references (I don't speak German). Re: "many of its other members", I've cut "many of its", but the article said "Within the Central Committee he was one of those that [...] argued that the party should resign from the Austrian government." - does this not mean that other members argued for it as well?--Launchballer 20:07, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
I started to edit the wording and came across some phrasing where the meaning is not very clear like "In 1932, he took part in building the Jungfront movement, and in Graz he worked with Otto Fischer and Willy Scholz to challenge the party leadership control over the Jungfront.". Also, Soman you may want to double check that I've not inadvertently changed any meaning. Rjjiii (talk) 01:43, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
New enough, long enough, Earwig notes no notable copyvio. Hook is interesting but on an offline source (Österreich in Geschichte und Literatur, Vol. 40-41) so I am assuming good faith. QPQ is completed. Everything seems to check out! Ornithoptera (talk) 05:37, 7 May 2024 (UTC)
@Soman and Ornithoptera: This article needs a robust copy edit before it gets anywhere near the main page.--Launchballer 23:23, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
